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Stefan Buhrmester
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| Posted: Fri Dec 17, 2004 2:55 am
Post subject: Need help with application |
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Hi,
I am trying to write an application as Game Master at Blizzard. I don't
have any experience in writing formal british english (I am german), so I
want to ask if somebody would be so kind and check for grammar or maybe
give some suggestions?
Thanks ;-)
Application as Game Master DE
Dear Sir/Madam
with reference to your advertisement on wow-europe.com I am writing to
apply as Game Master (DE). At the moment I am a student at Technical
University Darmstadt and working on my Bachelors degree in computer
technologie.
Since role-playing-games have allways been my favourite hobby, I now am
developer and administrator of my own german browser-based RPG with more
than 4.000 active players. In its now allmost two years of existance I was
able to gain wide experience with people and in supporting communities in
a team. I am familiar with all sorts of community tools.
Furthermore I enjoy working with people very much, and working at a
company like Blizzard allways has been one of my dreams, since I want to
use my skills in a productive and enjoyable environment.
Finally I enclose my CV and a copy of my educational qualification.
I would appriciate the opportunity to discuss matters further at a
personal interview
Yours faithfully,
Stefan Buhrmester
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Tom
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| Posted: Fri Dec 17, 2004 3:51 am
Post subject: Re: Need help with application |
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Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
| Quote: | Hi,
I am trying to write an application as Game Master at Blizzard. I don't
have any experience in writing formal british english (I am german), so
I want to ask if somebody would be so kind and check for grammar or
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so kind as to check the grammar
| Quote: | maybe give some suggestions?
Thanks ;-)
Application as Game Master DE
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Application *as* or *for* ?
Dear Sir/Madam,
| Quote: |
with reference to your advertisement on wow-europe.com I am writing to
apply as Game Master (DE). At the moment I am a student at Technical
University Darmstadt and working on my Bachelors degree in computer
technologie.
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technology
| Quote: | Since role-playing-games have allways been my favourite hobby, I now am
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role-playing games always
| Quote: | developer and administrator of my own german browser-based RPG with
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a developer
| Quote: | more than 4.000 active players. In its now allmost two years of
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(ugly sentence)
4,000 almost
| Quote: | existance I was able to gain wide experience with people and in
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existence
| Quote: | supporting communities in a team. I am familiar with all sorts of
community tools.
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examples ??
| Quote: | Furthermore I enjoy working with people very much, and working at a
company like Blizzard allways has been one of my dreams, since I want
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has always been
| Quote: | to use my skills in a productive and enjoyable environment.
Finally I enclose my CV and a copy of my educational qualification.
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just the one qualification?
Usually a CV will detail qualifications, unless you a enclosing a copy of a
certificate - in which case you should say so.
| Quote: | I would appriciate the opportunity to discuss matters further at a
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not finally?
appreciate
| Quote: | personal interview
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full stop.
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Yours faithfully,
Stefan Buhrmester |
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| Posted: Fri Dec 17, 2004 3:55 am
Post subject: Re: Need help with application |
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Run it through a spell-check routine...
technology
always
almost
4,000 (Americans and Britains use the comma, not the period)
Otherwise it looks fine
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Tom
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| Posted: Fri Dec 17, 2004 5:03 am
Post subject: Re: Need help with application |
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Tom wrote...
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Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
developer and administrator of my own german browser-based RPG with
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missed one...
German
You should also probably provide them with the URL |
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Stefan Buhrmester
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| Posted: Sat Dec 18, 2004 5:04 pm
Post subject: Re: Need help with application |
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On Thu, 16 Dec 2004 22:03:54 +0000, Tom <me@privacy.net> wrote:
| Quote: | Tom wrote...
[very much helpfull stuff]
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Thank you  !!!
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Tom
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| Posted: Sat Dec 18, 2004 5:33 pm
Post subject: Re: Need help with application |
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Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
| Quote: | Tom wrote...
[very much helpfull stuff]
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[sigh]
RTFD |
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Stefan Buhrmester
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| Posted: Sat Dec 18, 2004 6:06 pm
Post subject: Re: Need help with application |
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On Sat, 18 Dec 2004 10:33:58 +0000, Tom <me@privacy.net> wrote:
| Quote: | Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
Tom wrote...
[very much helpfull stuff]
[sigh]
RTFD
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i'm solly :/
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